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POEM: Your Happiness is my number one
littlenedved
It's hard to see that beautiful smile 
and know its not for me,
for now alli can do is hope... is pray...
that i can hold you in my arms again one day.

Our time together, my most treasured memories,
That night i asked you, and you said yes...
YES!!! that word caused joyous intoxication deep inside me
that night under the stars, our first kiss...
i went through blissful delirium

Your perfection awes my soul.
If you weren't real, i would make you up,
My greatest consolation...

that if you weren't happy being with me...

Now you are <3

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Hi Seb

I hope you had a great Easter break!

In the interim, whoa! This poem really moved me, it was heartbreaking! The first stanza particularly captured the mood well...

It's hard to see that beautiful smile
and know its not for me,
for now all I can do is hope... is pray...
that I can hold you in my arms again one day.


It was actually a little terrifying to be honest, that whole idea that love can be taken for granted to the point where even the smallest smile afterward can break your heart with knowing it's not yours to enjoy any more. Very well explained, I love your diction!

Well done!
Liz


Hey gooner,

Ah yes I know the feeling in the first stanza especially, I was actually going to write something about this topic recently but you've beat me to it...and probably said it more coherently than I could have.

I read you first poem a few weeks ago and noticed you've stuck with the format, so well done, are you enjoying writing?

yeah a bit... im not a poet lol its not really my thing but it helps me to express how im feeling atm ... its a killer lol :(

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